Friday, May 29, 2009

Ch. 9: Choosing Adjectivals
Adjectival-a modifier of a noun, referring to function.

Participle phrases sound a little odd to me, but I’d like to try one by replacing one a previously used sentence in the paper. The movable participle seems to best pertain to the various ways the following sentence can be constructed (I’m going to change it because there’s a lack of information).
Original: The cover song is the offspring of artistic influence
Alteration #1: As an offspring of artistic influence, the cover song often maintains many movements made in the original.
Alteration #2: By repeating many of the movements made in the original, the cover song becomes the offspring of artistic influence.

I came across the section about sentence appositives during this reading, which I love using in my writing in general. I looked through my paper to see what I could find (some are simpler than others):
• Harvey claims that each encounter has the ability to subconsciously change the identity of culture. This implicates that the members of the given culture must operate similarly—thereby rendering meaning utterly subjective
• When the cover is written, further cultural residue has amassed around the occurrences that may (or may not) have driven the original song to be conceived—instead it is a response, a retort even.
However I have other uses of M-dashes, which I believe I see more frequently, that add information to the sentence rather than summing it up: “The second version came about in 1988 when former member of The Velvet Underground, John Cale, heard the song and asked Cohen to see the collection of verses—of which Cohen chose to send him only 15.”

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