Wednesday, June 3, 2009

Fashionably late.

Sorry for the tardiness, again. As this is the last go round, I can say with 100% confidence that it won't happen again. This is from the opening to a paper on Coleridge, which I think is much better with appositives.

Original:
Samuel Taylor Coleridge died on July 25th, 1834, and was interred in a family vault at London's Highgate cemetery. This cemetery features other literary and philosophical superstars such as George Eliot and Karl Marx. Coleridge's remains were kept in this company until the 6th of June, 1961, when they were transferred into the crypt of the nearby Parish Church of St Michael’s.

Now containing appositive-y goodness:
Following hus death on July 25th, 1834, Samuel Taylor Coleridge was interred in a family vault at the Highgate cemetery in London--a cemetery that in the following half-century would see the addition of such other notable figures as George Eliot and Karl Marx. This eclectic triumvirate of entombed literary and philosophical superstars was broken up on the 6th of June, 1961, when Coleridge’s remains were transferred into the crypt of the nearby Parish Church of St Michael’s.

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